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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)

TITLE: An Aardvark with an Attitude
By Brad Paulson
09/10/06


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The serenity of the garden was shattered when an angry voice shouted, “Where is he? I know he’s hiding and I’m gonna find him!” All of the animals gave plenty of space for Steve the aardvark to make his way through the garden.

“Adam! Show yourself!”

No one had seen Steve this angry before. Apprehension outweighed curiosity and the animals scrambled for cover when Steve caught sight of Adam in the distance.

“I want to have a word with you, Adam,” Steve said, unsuccessfully trying to control his anger.

“What can I do for you, Steve? You seem upset.” Adam was clueless as to what all the fuss was about.

“I want you to change my name. Aardvark is a ridiculous name and I will not allow myself and my descendants the dishonor of living with such a humiliating title.” Steve seemed to be calmed a bit by the mere utterance of his frustration, but he was still fuming.

“I don’t think it’s such a bad name,” said Adam.

“Well of course you don’t, it’s not your name! You get to be called Man. A pleasantly concise one syllable word that doesn’t start with two stinkin’ vowels. I’m already the laughing stock of the garden. I don’t care what you have to do to change it, but if you don’t I’m gonna have to go over your head, straight to the big guy.” Steve was panting.

“Calm down Steve,” said Adam. “There are certain advantages to the name Aardvark. It’s easy to remember and if you ever start a business you’d probably be the first name in the phone book.”

Steve shot Adam a look of disgust. “You know as well as I do that if I have a ridiculous name, I will be considered a ridiculous animal. I want a name that reflects my sleek and stylish design. Why can’t I have a name like Cheetah or Cougar? Those are cool names. I’ll trade Aardvark for Cougar.”

“It’s too late. I already turned the names in. Besides, God made clear it was my responsibility to name the animals. I did my best and I am not going to dishonor Him by changing yours.” Adam felt that he was well within his authority, but Steve was not giving in that easily.

“Okay look, even alot of the ridiculous animals got cool names. For example, the Elephant Seal, now, even you must admit that that is a ridiculous animal. But Elephants are cool so the name Elephant Seal works, which is why they’re not here complaining.”

“What are you suggesting, Steve?”

“Elephant Cougar,” Steve paused briefly for effect, “It’s a sleek and stylish name and it kind of plays off this long nose thing I’ve got going.” Steve folded his paws appearing confident that the logical nature of his argument would sway Adam.

“No, I am not changing your name to Elephant Cougar.”

“Awe, come on.”

“Look Steve, God gave me a job to do and I did my best. Not everyone is going to be happy with the names I have given them, but that’s just the way it is. I’m not going to let everyone who comes along try to influence me into doing what they want. My concern is what God wants, not anybody else, and you’re just going to have to accept that.” Adam nodded his head indicating that the conversation was over.

“You haven’t heard the last of this Adam!” Steve yelled as he turned and stomped away. “I’m not just going to roll over and play dead on this one!”

Adam let out a sigh of relief as Steve disappeared into the lush foliage. “Well,” he said to himself, “as far as this day is concerned, things can only get better from here.” The moment was interrupted by the voice of Eve calling from the center of the garden.

“Adam, I need your help! I can’t reach this apple.”


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Jacqueline Zerres09/14/06
Maybe Adam's time would have been better spent re-naming the AArdvark!? Great story!
Joanne Sher 09/15/06
Clever and funny - I definitely enjoyed this!!
Marilyn Schnepp 09/15/06
The Title lured me in. Big on humor, light on topic, but a pleasant and delightful read; a nice change of pace. One suggestion, Capitalize "Big Guy" (even though I personally don't like Him called that) it deserves Capitals. Great creativity on this piece. Good Job!
Jan Ross09/16/06
Very, very clever! Two things -- I was confused at first ... was Steve the Aardvark? Yes, but it took me a while to understand that. Also, calling the Lord the "big guy" was a bit too casual for Adam. And, even so, it should have been capitalized! Aside from my silly nit-picky comments, this was delightful and took a lot of creative thinking! And, I LOVE YOUR ENDING! :)
Donna Haug09/16/06
Hmm. I wonder if you could have "attitudes" before the fall. ;) Very cute story.
Dolores Stohler09/18/06
Cute and funny! Thank you for making me laugh. I would like to set the record straight about the apple though. Apples don't grow in the Middle East. The fruit Adam & Eve ate was of a single tree God placed in the Garden. After the fall, the tree was removed from the garden, never to appear again. The reason God placed it there in the first place is thought to be a test of obedience & sin, simply put, is disobedience to God's laws.
Teri Wilson09/18/06
I loved this! Very cute and creative. Kind of similar to my entry in Masters (so of course I love it)...Great minds do think alike.
david grant09/19/06
Aaardvark: literally means "earth pig." Scientific name "Orycteropus afer" I think if the Steve new the scientific name he would liked Aardvark better. Fun story, however. A DaaVEY for your work!

Donna Emery09/19/06
I loved this! Your title drew me to the story, and then your marvelous imagination kept me reading. Well done!