The Official Writing Challenge
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09/15/06
What a grand tour. Thanks for the reminder that in a beautiful place it's possible to find echoes of Eden. My fav lines: watching the ocean slowly/lick the lip of the Earth. I'd be inclined to seperate out the first two stanzas as the last two lines set up an expectation for the rest of the poem. yeggy
09/15/06
I like how you see everything as touched by God's hand. This was nice.
09/17/06
I love the whole idea of this - gardens everywhere - that we're still possibly in that wonderful garden of old! This definitely made me think. Wonderful piece!
09/18/06
This Author has much better eyesight than I have; I wish I could see the beauty he/she sees; instead I see wars, famines, death, disasters, floods, earthquakes...but yes, when I do see a beautiful sunset, a rainbow or a butterfly...I know God Still has His hand in this old sin filled world. Thank you for this optimistic view; I will try harder to see...it is beautiful! Written well.
Nice garden tour! It is a valuable/comforting thought to look around and see evidences of God's original garden-creation still surrounding us. :-)
09/20/06
Beautiful selection of words – in some areas it was more like prose than poetry. I liked the lines about the lighthouse – the sea licking the lip of the earth. It had a powerful message.
11/13/06
Come and post your poetry at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/