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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)

TITLE: GOD'S GARDEN OF ALLITERATION
By Pearl Watley Mitchell
09/07/06


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Oh how I love an afternoon vacation
In Godís Garden of Alliteration.

On a sparkling summer afternoon
nature alliteration runs free
across the garden, over the lawn
and tauntingly through the trees.

Tiger Lilies lie lazily in sunlight
Daffodils dance defiantly 'til dusk
towering treetops thicken tightly
as Wisteria families foster trust.

Honeysuckles climb on jungle gym fences
Crepe Myrtles swing free in the breeze
Hydrangeas on bushes flirt with Amaryllis
and Marigolds sweetly visit Sweet Peas.

Blue-lipped tulips two-step trickily
to tunes of trillions of busy bees
and streams of sunlight glitter serenely
among boughs and branches so free.

Red bud roses solemnly are serenaded
by mandolin' chrysanthemums fair
while cheers rise in caladium stadiums
and nasturtium action fills the air.

Magnolia Leaves blow in blustery wind
and criss-cross falling Camellia Blooms
Violets stand high and look so proud
while sprayed Kudzu meets its doom

Sassy sunflowers taunt dizzy daisies
who forge foreign exotic rendezvous
and cranial Geraniums sell their genius
to Forget-Me-Nots at Carnation News.

Oh how I love an afternoon vacation
In Godís Garden of Alliteration.


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Donna Haug09/14/06
What fun! Reminds me of a poem I wrote on a "shoes" topic MANY moons ago on FW. You obviously know a lot about flowers. The rhythm could be tweeked, but I liked the effect of the two liner start and ending.
geoff anderson09/14/06
What frightfully fantastic fun to entertain my brain and make my soul whole! Or are some of those assonance?! Is assonance vowels and alliteration consonants?

The only one I didn't at least recognise was Kudzu, which was sprayed for some reason. Is it that Japanese bamboo that is taking over our gardens?

Some of the stuff I only got on my second reading, but then that's true with most articles. They all benefit from a closer scrutiny. Mutiny would go well with that but I couldn't think how.

Perhaps the title should have been 'God's Gorgeous Garden of Alliteration' ?

Well done anyway. Good fun.
Phyllis Inniss 09/15/06
I enjoyed this clever poem of alliteration. I wish I knew so many flowers and their characteristics. Great job.
Alexandra Wilkin09/15/06
This a darling poem, and darn near perfect. Lovely stuff - thank you! God bless xx
Jan Ackerson 09/15/06
This was indeed beautiful, and it never slipped into tongue twister category--just wonderful word choices from beginning to end.
Venice Kichura09/15/06
This is beautiful!
Virginia Gorg09/15/06
When I first read this title (way too quickly), I thought it said "God's garden of alligators." I was surprised, but very pleasantly so. Well done, reads well. Thanks :)
Jan Ross09/15/06
Beautifully written! It tickled me -- I couldn't wait to read the next line to see its focus!

Lovely work -- creative, for sure! Not overbearing, not overdone, just beautiful! :)
william price09/16/06
Very smart and well done!!!
God bless.
Marilyn Schnepp 09/16/06
No tongue twisters here.
A difficult feat
not to mention sweet,
when it's so nice and neat. Good job.
david grant09/18/06
One of Dav's Favs!
Rita Garcia09/19/06
Beautiful,and practically perfect in every way!