The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a good story. I find that stories told in the present tense are harder to write and read than those told in the past tense. It was neat to walk with her down memory lane by the river.
This was a very nice memory, even if all the memories weren't pleasant.
Like this line best and thot maybe you could have centered a story just around it. " “You can talk to me through the water,” she used to whisper her permission, and let the wind carry her words upward." Not the perfect sentence but there is a personal intimacy in it that I would have like to read more of.