The Official Writing Challenge
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09/07/06
Very creative piece. There's one set of quotes missing ... but that's so minor. Great dialogue and good story
09/07/06
A bit confusing for this reader, but good writing and a great message. Nice job.
09/08/06
Maybe I was looking for a bigger pay off, and maybe that would come if the story was longer. You kept me intrigued all the way, however. Like to see this one longer, give a bit more detail to those people he threw away. Would like to also see a more satisfying ending. But good concept.