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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Melody (08/24/06)

TITLE: God's Metronome
By Brenda Kern


Lord, it seems our timing's off,
and things have gotten a little hazy...
I'm either ahead or have fallen behind:
Your metronome is driving me crazy!

When life is dull, and a boring routine
I want to hurry and rush and speed.
You keep the tempo set at 'plodding,'
while meeting my every need.

When things are special, going just right
I want time to stretch out a bit.
What a surprise, time flies by,
Your metronome's pacing won't quit.

Lord, you know I feel out of sync with life--
everyone else moves along, with a plan.
I spin my wheels, and don't move an inch,
then go back to where the melody began.

Am I stuck on an endless refrain,
While others add verse after verse?
I don't hear any soaring crescendo,
My fear and isolation grows worse.

What key am I in? Is this the right page?
I need to find a place to start.
The tick of the patient metronome mocks me,
and self-doubt stabs at my heart.

Where is my orchestra, symphony, or band?
Where is the group where I belong?
I'd like to participate: to sing or to play--
or at least try to follow along.

My pitch seems off, I'm out of tune:
clearly a duet isn't coming my way.
The beat goes on--it's solo all along--
I wish, I hope, and I pray.

God, I know that You're the Composer,
the Lyricist, and You have a plan:
but when do I get to sing in unison
and make my own music with a man?

The moving metronome never ceases
in its ever eternal back and forth.
The beat continues, and life goes on
and I wonder sometimes about my worth.

Maybe it's time for a brand new tune:
a key change? Different beat? What's best?
I'll need to trust Your lyrics and chorus
and when the music indicates, I'll rest.

My melody, song, and especially my pace
will have to move according to Your design.
And whether my life's coda is a duet or a solo--
which metronome's broken? It's mine.

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Sandra Smith08/31/06
Wow!!!! This resonated with my thoughts. It's wonderful to know that I'm not alone in my struggle.
Amy Michelle Wiley 09/01/06
Great message! I found that the beat didn't flow quite right in spots, but I enjoyed this. Very creative!
Suzanne R09/01/06
I was attracted to this because of the title (after years of plunking at the piano with the metronome ticking away) and wasn't disappointed by the sentiments.

I did wonder about how the steady beat links in with the theme, 'melody', which is more about the pitch, right? But that's just being picky.

Love the content ... can identify oh so well. WELL DONE!
Beth Muehlhausen09/01/06
Creative! Great title for this poem. I got the emphasis on beat...jow about one little addition about a certain line of notes...a melody? I liked this line: "God, I know that You're the Composer, the Lyricist." Good reminder. :-)
Joanne Sher 09/03/06
I definitely enjoyed this! I agree that some of the meter is off, but it didn't detract from this wonderful poem. Thanks!
Helen Paynter09/03/06
I especially enjoyed the last verse. Great message here.
Val Clark09/06/06
A great way of looking at our out of stepness with God. Particularly liked the layers in: And whether my life's coda is a duet or a solo--/which metronome's broken? It's mine. Yeggy
Jan Ross09/07/06
Very nicely done! Struggled with the meter a little -- other than that, it's awesome! Great work! :)
Debbie Sickler09/07/06
While I am married, so can't quite relate to the looking forward to making music of my own with a man, I related completely with the first half. I loved the 4th - 6th stanzas especially. Even with the meter a little off as others mentioned, this was still a touching poem and I'm glad I read it tonight. :)
Marilyn Schnepp 09/07/06
Very creative and alot of work put into this poetic refrain; however, it did have some spots where the flow was a bit botched - but all in all a good job. Nicely done.
Brenda Kern 09/28/06
testing 9-27-06
Monique Fox11/13/06
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