The Official Writing Challenge
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This gave me chills! Beautiful! Thanks so much for reminding all of us of our suffering brothers and sisters around the world!
Your story is well-crafted and powerful! Writing from the prospective of one about to die, and then translated into life was very effective!
08/31/06
This has got to be one of your best! I loved the names, the set up, the pain, the glorious end. Very well done!
09/04/06
How you can write like this, absolutely revolting terror and utter Heavenly bliss, all inside one short story, is awesome. You know how to make words do your bidding.
09/04/06
This took my breath away. As difficult as the first part is to read, the ending is incredibly beautiful and moving. Congratulations on a job very well done! Only one nitpicky comment - I think "Ones" should be "one's" in the first sentence of the fourth paragraph. BRAVO!
09/05/06
Your vivid, descriptive language showing the horror of darkness and the beauty of His light in a surrendered soul grabbed my senses in a profound way. Absolutely amazing!!!
09/05/06
Very powerful - makes you wonder if each of us would be able to stay strong in our faith if faced with that choice -I pray that we all are.
09/05/06
I thought that I was very familiar with the words, "strength to endure." But your story gave the words deep soulful meaning. I agree, BRAVO!
09/05/06
Wow - this is so vivid, so frightening, so tactile. This moved me to tears. Amazingly wonderful and wonderfully amazing!
09/05/06
Wow. This was very well written. As others have said, as hard as it was to read, the ending made it all worth it.
09/05/06
Powerful writing, great title. Good job, indeed!
09/05/06
Fabulous and inspiring! This is a very vivid and emotional piece. Great work describing the scene and the emotions. I was curious where "melody" was going to fit in, but you included it nicely at the end. Great job!
09/05/06
Well . . . that was intense!! Excellent job!
09/06/06
Riveting, disturbing and a great reminder of reality.
09/06/06
Chilling account of the horrors some face at the hands of evil. Great writing. I'm holding you responsible for any future nightmares! LOL :)
09/07/06
Congrats Debbie on a well-deserved win.
09/07/06
I totally hated reading this and felt physically sick as I read it ... but that is a huge compliment to the author. You've brought to light something which is and has been so horrible and yet so real throughout the centuries. Thank goodness you finished with such hope ... although my stomach is still in my throat....

Well done, and congratulations on a well deserved win.
I agree with all that. I am still wiping tears away. Awesome job! I would never even attempt something like this. You did it so well. You have a wonderful gift.
Congrats!
Congratulations! I just knew this heart-render was a winner!
09/08/06
A tough read, no doubt a tougher story to write, thanks for persevering with it. This line I thought was particularly good: 'Time all at once stands still and fast forwards.' yeggy