The Official Writing Challenge
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09/02/06
I could almost hear and see this .. this line is great: It’s not just what we see, but what we feel.” Well done.
09/07/06
I liked this. I could feel the wind and the hard thing hitting his leg. And I could feel the joy as he told his own little son to wait "here it comes." Well done. A DAVEY for you comes with the mornin' wind.

09/08/06
Congratulations on winning one of the top slots this week, Steve!
This story held my attention, trying to figure out what's happening! I do like the full circle of the man taking his son to experience his own childhood memory with the grandfather. Even with your beautiful description, however, I'm still wondering and, I guess, wanting more. {What actually IS this "mornin' melody?")

I also want to thank you, Steve, for your comment on my "Strange Music" story. I wrote it first person for more impact, but it actually happened to my brother's wife.