The Official Writing Challenge
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09/02/06
"Sing the hymns with gusto" - if only we all would do that. Nice retelling of a familiar story. Good use of words and descriptions.
09/02/06
A truly wonderful message...but hard on the eyes with no paragraph spacing; however, I'm glad I read it. Very nicely done.
09/04/06
I totally forgot about this story and it is so perfect for this topic. You remind us how potent music can be as worship, as thanksgiving and as spiritual discipline. Music isn't just fun, it's powerful. This is a keeper!

In the first part you might try showing rather than telling, giving us a brief scene of the prison, and maybe dialogue in the jail, which then leads into your broader point.