The Official Writing Challenge
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09/02/06
Such a beautiful story of a city prepared for us...and I enjoyed the concept of a melody in the wind. Nicely done.
09/07/06
There are gems hidden in this story, but they may be buried by bulky paragraphs. Pick out the gems here and rewrite this story with a more spread out and leaner look. Invite the reader to come and enjoy with a good lead, a leaner body, and a snappy ending.