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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Melody (08/24/06)

TITLE: Don't Talk, Listen!
By Sue Dent
08/24/06


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Don’t Talk, Listen!

Not an hour and she calls me as I’m driving home
Says she’s fine yet somehow I can tell from her tone
She needs words that only a true friend can give her.

Yeah, her roommate arrived and she’s really a drag
Won’t shut-up, won’t sit down, every word is an arrogant brag
Can I help? What would I do if I had this problem?

A house made of glass, a rock in the hand
You can’t make the choice unless you understand
Every song has a melody, if you just listen.


Yes the drugs were a part of his life
So much pain, so much hurt, so much guilt, such unbearable strife
Said they cared, yet no one had been able to reach him.

In his eyes I could see a small trickle of hope
In a glance, I could tell he’d turned loose of the ropes
How amazing it was when he broke down and smiled!

A house made of glass, a rock in the hand
You can’t make the choice unless you understand
Every song has a melody, if you just listen.


Sharing herself with strangers.
Despite the element of danger
How badly she thought she needed the money.

Who were they? What was she?
Why should she want to be
anything like any of them anyway?

Passed her by, walked along
not a word, not a song
No one to tell her how much they loved her.


A house made of glass, a rock in the hand
You can’t make the choice unless you understand
Every song has a melody, if you just listen.


Not a sound entered in
Deafness came, what a sin!
Yet the melody was more than he could keep.

Never hearing, still he wrote
Every sound, every note
What a marvel was Ludwig Von Beethoven!

A lot to be said, just as much to be heard,
Concentrate on listening and not just the words
Every soul is a melody which needs renewing.*

* Stephane Mallarme


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Rita Garcia08/31/06
This really spoke to me, may we all find the melody within us!
"Every song has a melody, if you just listen."
I love this line!!


Brenda Craig08/31/06
I got it! People in glass houses should not throw stones. Every life is of value and carries the melody of God, if someone would listen long enough to hear it-to love them, things would change. Besides what would we do if the situation were visa-versa. I loved the lines:

A house made of glass, a rock in the hand
You can’t make the choice unless you understand
Every song has a melody, if you just listen.

Before you throw your stone, remember; Mercy triumphs over judgement and love covers a multitude of sins, allowing us to hear beneath the surface. I loved this. Very thought provoking.
Helen Paynter09/03/06
This is rather beautiful. I particularly loved the refrain very powerful. I got a bit confused with Beethoven at the end - didn't quite follow how his cameo fitted with the preceding ones. But I'm probably being obtuse. I really heard this as a song, and I'd love to hear the (pardon the pun) melody.
Debbie Sickler09/05/06
This does make you stop to listen and think. I agree though, that the comment about Beethoven threw me a little. Still good though. :)
Jan Ackerson 09/05/06
Loved the 3-line chorus, and the unique structure. I would encourage you to spend a bit more time with these entries, and refine them--each one has so much potential. This one, for example, just shines in content, rhyme scheme, message--some closer attention to meter would transform it from pearl to diamond.
Joanne Sher 09/05/06
Love love LOVE the three line refrain! This definitely blessed me!
Rebecca Livermore09/06/06
The refrain was the best part. That helped tie it all together!
david grant09/06/06
Nice work. A DAVEY for you.
Joanne Malley09/06/06
Very nice! Is this a song? I'd love to hear music to these words. Last stanza's my favorite. Blessings. Jo
Sara Harricharan 09/07/06
I finally found your entry....awesome job! I love the line with the glass house.
Marilyn Schnepp 09/08/06
Congrats on your Davey! Is Stephane Mallarme your Pen Name, or?? Didn't quite understand if this was written by you, or?? But free verse, well done.


   
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