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I love the title, and the message of the story. Truly, the cross is el Poder de dios - the Power of God.
Thank you for sharing this,

Dios te bendiga - God bless,

Kevin
08/25/06
An amazing story which kept me glued to the page right to the end. Great job!
A beautiful story. It was really touching. I enjoyed reading it.
A beautiful story. It was really touching. I enjoyed reading it.
A beautiful story. It was really touching. I enjoyed reading it.
08/28/06
Awesome--you took the expected stereotypes and trampled all over them. Very well-written story, with a unique take on the topice.
08/28/06
What a gripping, touching story with the ring of authenticity from someone with an insider's perspective! This is wonderful writing.
This is also a good illustration, I think, for the beginning writer, who has been told to "write what you know." Even if this is fiction it is written by using life experiences the writer knows best.
08/28/06
What I like - I almost skipped this because I don't know Spanish despite having it all around me! I'm glad I read it cause it was great! Terrific detail. Good beginning and loved the last line.
What I might change - I think you misspelled stealing. But then again,I could be wrong!:) So don't read these words as I have no spell check!!

Good writing!
08/28/06
Very stunning! I liked the way the story came full-circle. Great work!
08/29/06
I echo what Ann said, about the first visual image you painted for us being also the image we are left with at the end. Good technique. Makes the story feel finished.

Yes, 'steeling' should have been 'stealing' but other than that this was well-written.

Looking forward to seeing you in Masters!
08/29/06
What a compelling story!! Each scene was beautifully and vividly described, and the characterization was also wonderful. I especially loved the end. Wonderful!
08/29/06
I'm very rusty here, but "muy bonito, mi amigo"; (very beautiful, my friend) also, well written, realistic, creative and a really great read. Triple Kudos!
08/29/06
A sad and wonderful story. I love a story that breaks down negative assumptions. I sensed that is where you were headed and was so glad that you did. Very well-written and beautiful ending.
08/29/06
Can't say anything that hasn't already been said! This is truly a beautiful story, realistic, powerful, emotional, and captivating! Awesome and passionate message. Well Done!!! :)
A unique take. A very well written and gripping story. Great job.
08/30/06
Great job William. Loved the setting. The Spanish words were particularly effective (affective?? whatever). Enjoyed it very much.
08/30/06
Great job William. Loved the setting. The Spanish words were particularly effective (affective?? whatever). Enjoyed it very much.
William, this is priceless.

God Bless,
Trina<><
08/30/06
Chills and more chills! Awesome story - just awesome. I loved it!

side-note: Vasquez (Jose') is the name of my daughter's pitching coach who has kept a close eye on her in softball for 10 yrs. He's fantastic.
I didn't get to read this until now. I have to tell you, I'm blinking back the tears. Well done, Sir William! This is outstanding!
Masterful read! Totally engrossing! Expertly done!

Your writing, Sir William is STICKY! (My eyes were glued to your words)