The Official Writing Challenge
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08/24/06
What I like - Wow...I've been reading awhile and this is my favorite so far! Powerful delivery! You have the "show don't tell" factor down to a fine science.The man's words were so real...especially when you said he spoke with finality. Good sentence there.

What I might change - this is a tough one, cause I don't think anything at all.Except the man's name...lol...I couldn't pronounce it!:)
08/24/06
This is such a heartfelt piece - with a cry we all need to hear. I'm glad to know Umoh and his wife found surrender - true surrender - at last. I'd love to see another chapter in this story. There's so much potential.

Thanks for sharing, and God bless,

Kevin
08/28/06
I'm still crying...I'm speechless, just know that this is my favorite.
08/28/06
Hope you like masters. Oh, you want a critique? Not from me. No way! Wouldn't touch it. Oh, okay, here's my suggestion. *put my name on it. I want to go to masters!* Wonderful heartfelt writing.
08/28/06
The cross IS the "crux" of the matter, the most important key upon which all our understanding hangs. I relish the insight behind the story, and the story, itself, conveys the message in very readable fashion. Thank you.
08/29/06
A very emotional read, which comes from the pen of, the heart of, and the mind of a very creative and exceptional author. Well done.
08/31/06
Excellent work. I especially liked the clever "misleading," when the wife wonders where her husband is now. I thought he had died and she was wondering about his eternal soul. That made his entrance into the room a pleasant surprise.
08/31/06
Wow - very, very excellent story and writing. The emotions were so true to life and the message wonderful. Congratulations!!!
08/31/06
This is a great story beginning to end! Congratulations on placing 2nd!
08/31/06
This is a great story--truly moving. I readit a few days ago, but was in a hurry and didn't get to leave a comment. Congrats on your well deserved win!
09/01/06
Congratulations on your win. Very creative and well done.