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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cross (as in the Cross of Christ) (08/17/06)

TITLE: Guilty
By Sue Dent
08/17/06


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GUILTY


Guilty for a deed
never committed.
Pain is the only thing He
has permitted.

Was it for crimes that
I had done He groaned upon
the tree? Amazing pity,
grace unknown, And love beyond
degree!


Forget the hurt
Forget the pain

Alas, and did my Savior bleed, and did my Sov'reign die?
Would He devote that sacred head for such a worm as I?


Remember the words
of those past and gone.
Donít look back,
just move on.

Thus might I hide
my blushing face
While Calvary's cross
appears, Dissolve my
heart in thankfulness,
And melt mine eyes to
tears.


Live your life
it's what they wanted
though your mind
is still taunted.

But drops of grief
can ne'er repay
The debt of love I owe;
Here, Lord, I give
myself away,
'Tis all that I can do.


To die in vain,
there would be no
greater pain.

Well might the sun in
darkness hide,
And shut his glories in,
When Christ the mighty
Maker died
For man, the creature's
sin.


The veil is torn,
the weary worn.
Enter in
though all
have sinned.

No one denied,
no eye is dry.

Charged with
wanting to
save mankind.

A crime He
confessed to.

Guilty.

At the cross,
at the cross
Where I first
saw the light,
And the burden
of my heart
rolled away
It was there
by faith I
received my
sight,
And now I am
happy all the
day!



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Brenda Craig08/24/06
Absolutely beautiful free verse poem I loved it, loved it!! It is woven together with grace and sings like a song. My favorite line:

Charged with
wanting to
save mankind.

A crime He
confessed to.

Simply beautiful, blessings Brenda
Rita Garcia08/24/06
Beautiful,filled with inspiring words of love. I have tears running down my face.
Kristin Slavik08/24/06
Not only is this a beautiful testament of faith, I loved the way the words form a physical picture of the cross. Well done.
Helen Paynter08/24/06
Wow, a real break from your usual writing. Absolutely beautiful. Wish I'd written it myself (grinding teeth).
Stephen Paynter08/24/06
Hi ... I found this a most thought provoking and interesting piece ... well done indeed! Parts expressed the wonder of vicarious suffering so aptly and beautifully.

There were a few places were I either wasn't quite sure what you were saying / implying, or where the ideas expressed were not ones I really grasped. For example, in the first verse: "Pain is the only thing He / has permitted." I wasn't sure who the "He" was in this sentence. If the "has" had been "was" the idea would have been along the lines of what I expected. Of course, I am probably being dense!

I too loved the way it was laid out, and the central idea of being guilty for wanting to save mankind. I novel and powerful idea.

A winning entry! God blessed writing indeed.
david grant08/25/06
Nice verse between the song lyrics, but you really needed to reference the song(s) you used here. "At The Cross," by Isaac Watts. Could be considered plagerism without the giving due credit.
Sue Dent08/25/06
I know there have been several times on an entry where I've forgotten to give credit for a song lyric or verse, thinking I already had. Good thing we can always go back and add that! Whew! I too liked the free-verse between the lyrics. ;)
Val Clark08/27/06
I like the way you contrasted the two guilts, one deserved and the other undeserved, very interesting perspective.
Marilyn Schnepp 08/28/06
Beautiful, but I too wondered about the plagairy aspect, and that bothered me; but I expected it to be footnoted at the bottom; however, very unique and effectual.
Jan Ackerson 08/28/06
Great minds run in the same direction--I formed a cross, too--but yours is prettier.

Wonderful job, and in your defense, "At the Cross" is in the public domain.
Jan Ross08/28/06
Very creative ... very beautifully written! I love the hymn woven in (yes, it's public domain). Awesome! :)
Joanne Sher 08/29/06
Lovely, lovely LOVELY! Love the look and message of this. Just beautiful! Wonderful job of working your own writings in with the hymn. I really enjoyed this!
william price08/29/06
Forgive me. I am guilty of not reading this earlier. I usually don't follow poetry that well, but this I liked, not only because it was well written, but anointed, and it ministered to me. Now notice, I didn't mention the cr-----e word in this. It was mind you, but I know how you feel about it:)
God bless.
dub W08/30/06
Absolutely beautiful - this will be reprinted, and I trust in a National magazine.
Ruth Neilson08/30/06
Love the cross shape of the poem and the words are just as powerful! Keep up the good work.
Sara Harricharan 08/31/06
Very moving! I loved the way you wrote this-inspiring.
Shari Armstrong 09/01/06
Wow - very cool (I had thought about doing something visual like this, but it didn't work with the direction mine took).

Awesome!