The Official Writing Challenge
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The ending of this is PERFECT. YOur description is SO vivid and haunting. Excellent job! I noticed a couple of misspellings, but they did not detract from the beauty of this piece.
I'm not going to give the ending away. I'm glad you did told it without being obvious. Nice job. One of my favs.
Oh, what glorious competition in level 3 -- my own entry just dropped another notch! This is seriously creative and gripping writing, calling beautiful pictures into my head.

First I thought you were writing about soldiers, then "Sir Francis" made me wonder. Now, I think you shall write more and make this a book :)