The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 626 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
08/21/06
The ending of this is PERFECT. YOur description is SO vivid and haunting. Excellent job! I noticed a couple of misspellings, but they did not detract from the beauty of this piece.
08/22/06
I'm not going to give the ending away. I'm glad you did told it without being obvious. Nice job. One of my favs.
08/23/06
Oh, what glorious competition in level 3 -- my own entry just dropped another notch! This is seriously creative and gripping writing, calling beautiful pictures into my head.

First I thought you were writing about soldiers, then "Sir Francis" made me wonder. Now, I think you shall write more and make this a book :)