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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Valley (08/10/06)

TITLE: The leaning outhouse
By dub W
08/11/06


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The outhouse leans a little more than it used to, some of the weeds have crept a little farther down the edge of the fence, but the white washed chapel still stands over looking the valley. Years have beaten the tiny building where I regularly attended church with my grandparents. Storms and tornados have ripped at her wooden sides, but each time a board gave in to nature, one of the local farmers would show up and nail a new one into place. Before Sunday another family would arrive and paint the new board. That’s been the history of Salem church for as long as I can remember.

My grandparents are buried in the cemetery next to the church, along with more of my relatives. They are joined in a holy congregation of multiple generations of area families. A few years ago, the highway department moved several graves. The new highway ripped several yards of earth from the church property. I don’t know which families were moved, I imagine the families were upset, but there was little to stop the progress of the highway.

Church still happens at Salem church. Once a month, a traveling pastor comes by and delivers a message. He serves Holy Communion on that Sunday. Miss Mildred used to keep the communion cups at her house. My guess is that her daughter or granddaughter is the keeper today.

I haven’t attended Salem church since the fifties; I probably should some time, for no other reason to say this is my foundation. However, I’d rather remember my own years, when we would drive up out of the river valley to the little white washed church. We would park on the lawn with the dozen or so other pickups and cars, and enter the sweet smelling building. My memory of the smell, I think, has more to do with my uncle’s pipe than the shellac of the pews. The older men usually stood on the porch and smoked, there they would determine the fate of the world, discuss the crop, and describe the weather. Youngsters were guided to a corner of the church to gather around the old piano and learn church songs or hear stories about Jesus. My aunt Floreen always led the youth, she was also the piano player.

When church started I usually sat with my grandfather or uncles. We sat on hard pews coated with years of shellac. On a summer’s day I could lean forward and my starched white shirt would stick to the pew back and make a ripping sound. My uncles never saw the humor in that act. My grandmother and aunts sat together in another part of the church.

On many Sundays, the preacher would raise his hand and ask everyone to move to the river. We returned to our cars and drove down into the valley, to where the 102 tributary stream, which we simply called the “hundred and two,” meandered toward the White Cloud river. When we arrived, the preacher would be standing in the water, and several folks dressed in long white robes would one at a time walk into the water, then the preacher would grab them and dunk them in the stream. My grandfather told me this was baptism of the spirit – a washing of sin away. Many years later I understood the concept, I wish I had been baptized in the hundred and two.

That same Sunday we would all go back to the church and have a giant picnic right there in front of the outhouse. As evening crept in on the congregation, everyone would go back into the church to listen to Aunt Floreen play “Old Rugged Cross,” or “Down in the Valley.” The preacher would preach a little more, then the congregation would all shake hands and head back down into the valley for another farm week.

I attend a big ol church in the village now. It doesn’t have a leaning outhouse.


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Joanne Sher 08/17/06
You do an exceptional job of "painting" this scene for the reader. I could picture it so well - you have some fantastic images here. I wasn't too crazy about the last sentence (didn't really pull it together for me), but other than that, this was quite wonderful!!
Lynda Schultz 08/17/06
I actually liked that last line. To me it said that today might have more sense, but yesterday had more feeling and you wished for a return to those "feeling" days. Wonderful description.
Mtheto Hara08/20/06
Lovely article, I love the title a lot it really invited me to wanna read the piece. Good stuff. cheers.
david grant08/21/06
liked the "leaning outhouse lead."

Betsy Markman08/22/06
The visual imagery in this story left me feeling nostalgic. Thank you for painting such gentle pictures.

I liked the "smell of shellac" idea, too. It made me remember exactly how the pews at my childhood church tasted. Don't ask me why I ever learned how the pews tasted...

My mind filled in one last phrase at the close of the story. "It has no leaning outhouse. Too bad."

Thanks for the enjoyable read.
Marty Wellington 08/22/06
Wow--another great read that draws me to another place and time so expertly. It was so weird how I could relate to this story--my dad's cousins went to a New Salem Church that sounded much like this one from the descriptions and the proximity to the river. Thanks for sharing.
Edy T Johnson 08/23/06
Dittos to all above comments. I hope my initial "double take" isn't offensive in any way, but the third line down...:

"Years have beaten the tiny building where I regularly (what!? ...oh, whew!) attended church"

...sent me back to re-read from the beginning. I was still thinking outhouse, while you had already moved to the chapel. (Sorry! I'm so bad! I think it was the word "tiny" that threw me.)


   
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