The Official Writing Challenge
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08/10/06
How marvelous to experience such a walk with Christ!

if anything, I'd work on tightening up the meter a bit; we just get a rhythm established and then we lose it.

Very meaningful poem.
08/12/06
Yes! Really meaningful. I can belive Jesus saying those things. Work on the structure and rythm of this piece for more power.
08/12/06
The strength of this poem is in what Jesus says. It is a very good synopsis of his teachings. However, getting to this point through the erratic structure of the poem took some effort. Keep working on this piece. I think it has potential.