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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Vision (08/03/06)

TITLE: More Than Just A Man
By Esther Tamling-Seffrood


I had a vision of a man,
Who came and took me by the hand.
He said please come and follow me,
There’s something I want you to see.

As we went off upon our way,
He said there’s much I need to say,
But I must show you these things first,
My friend you haven’t seen the worst.

Then he took me to a place,
You could see it written on their face,
They were filled with fear and hate.
He walked away and I said, ‘wait!
Can’t we help them?
Please sir, don’t you understand?’

He said, ‘yes I really do.
And know it breaks my heart in two,
Just to see that this is done,
Cause they refuse to know the Son.’

Then he took me far away,
Where we got on our knees and prayed,
For the little ones who were there,
Pain and suffering were everywhere.

As my heart was broke in two,
This could happen to me and you.
Please say that someone somewhere cares.
Yes God has heard our every prayer,
For the little ones,
That they might come to know the Son.

Then once again he took my hand,
And I began to understand,
I saw the gaping holes were there,
And I couldn’t help but stare.
Oh Lord, you are my King!
Creator of everything!

As a tear rolled down my face,
I said you gladly took my place.
You must have loved me so,
And now I want the world know!

I said, ‘please tell me what to do,
My Lord, I want to be like you,
I want to share your Holy love,
That precious gift from up above.
Lord, what can I do?
I can do nothing without you.

He said, ‘care for the orphan child.
Remain humble, meek and mild.
Share with the widows, young or old.
Place not your trust in coins of gold.

Feed and clothe those who are without.
Be filled with faith and not with doubt.
Believe in me, yes, I am the way.
Read and share my truth everyday.

Make sure God’s precious seeds are sown.
My child don’t ever feel alone.
God wants your love, he wants it true.
A sincere heart he wants from you.
And you must turn away from sin.
Don’t let the adversary win.’

Then he turned to walk away.
He said, ‘there’s so much more to say,
And it is written in my book,
The Holy Bible, take a look,
Then you will understand,
I’m so much more than just a man.’

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Jan Ackerson 08/10/06
How marvelous to experience such a walk with Christ!

if anything, I'd work on tightening up the meter a bit; we just get a rhythm established and then we lose it.

Very meaningful poem.
david grant08/12/06
Yes! Really meaningful. I can belive Jesus saying those things. Work on the structure and rythm of this piece for more power.
Gary Sims08/12/06
The strength of this poem is in what Jesus says. It is a very good synopsis of his teachings. However, getting to this point through the erratic structure of the poem took some effort. Keep working on this piece. I think it has potential.