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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Vision (08/03/06)

TITLE: A Vision and a Vow
By Lynda Lee Schab
08/06/06


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Rose had never thought of herself as beautiful but today she smiled at the image in the mirror. She knew she would never win a beauty pageant; her skin was far from flawless, her nose was slightly too large, her hair lacked luster. And although not necessarily overweight, she could stand some firming up.

But today, she felt like a princess.

Today she would become Mrs. John Williams.

She smoothed her gown and turned this way and that, observing herself at each angle. What would John think as she walked down the aisle? Would his eyes light up? Would he smile? Faint? Throw up? Rose chuckled at the thought. Now that would be a wedding to remember!

She reached for a brush and pulled it through her hair. Her thoughts turned toward her husband-to-be. She giggled. Oh, how she loved the sound of that! Never in her life had she dreamed she would snag herself such a thoughtful, handsome, distinguished man. She smiled as she recalled her parents’ pleased reaction when she had shared the news.

“My little Rosie – a preacher’s wife! Who would have thought?” Her mother had exclaimed.

Although John hadn’t proposed in any remarkable way, the words he’d spoken to her while he was down on his knee truly captured her heart.

With enthusiasm twinkling in his eyes as he slid the ring on her finger, John said, “I have such big plans for us, Darlin’. May I share three significant visions I have for our future?”

Rose nodded, eager to hear what he had to say.

“How does eight children sound to you?”

Eight children! She was taken aback. Rose definitely wanted a large family but she had to admit that eight sort of exceeded her idea of “large.” At that moment, however, she wanted more than anything to please him and his excitement was contagious. She found herself readily agreeing.

“On to number two...one day I will be a renowned preacher and spread the Good News of Jesus Christ to the world. And you, Darlin’,” he continued playfully, “will be the most gorgeous famous preacher’s wife in the world.”

Rose beamed. She wasn’t so sure about the gorgeous part but had no doubt he would achieve his dream.

“And one more thing, Rosie.” John’s tone grew serious. “I vow at this moment that on our sixtieth wedding anniversary, when we’re eighty-five years old and our heads are completely gray and our skin has more wrinkles than a cotton shirt left in a heap all night, whether we’re both in wheelchairs or even bedridden, if we have to be spoon fed or helped to the bathroom, no matter what...I will still love you. In fact,” he proclaimed, “I’ll marry you all over again.”

A soft tap sounded on the door. Rose turned, her tears glistening in the light. Catherine stood, smiling at her, tears forming in her eyes as well. “Are you ready, Mama?”

Rose swiped at her weathered cheeks. “I’ve been ready for the past fifty-nine years, Sweetheart,” she said. She glanced once more at her reflection and reached for her walker. Slowly, persistently, she inched her way down the hall and out the door. Once outside, her gaze rested on the groom, eighty-five year old John Williams, world-renowned preacher. She barely noticed his gray hair or his wrinkled skin or the wheelchair in which he sat. He was still as handsome as he had been the first time she’d walked down the aisle.

As Rose made her way down the white runner lain over the freshly mowed lawn of her own backyard and approached her husband of sixty years, she couldn’t help but notice the twinkle in his eye, still as bright as ever.

“My eyesight may be going, Rosie, but you’re still a vision,” he said.

She sank into the empty wheelchair waiting for her and grasped the gnarled hand of the only lover she’d ever known. Rose took a moment and looked at each of their eight children, seventeen grandchildren and four great-grandbabies. She marveled at how, although they’d gone through their share of hard times and heartaches, John’s vision for them had never wavered. They’d ended up exactly where he knew they would.

And for the second time in sixty well-worn, glorious years, Rose became Mrs. John Williams.


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Jessica Schmit08/10/06
I think this is such a beautiful story. I wouldn't be surprised if it placed. I really loved it. The ending was incredible. Great work!
Jessica Schmit08/10/06
I think this is such a beautiful story. I wouldn't be surprised if it placed. I really loved it. The ending was incredible. Great work!
Caitlynn Lowe08/10/06
Aww...That's such a sweet story! It sure would be nice to be as fortunate as Rose, one day. Overall, a wonderful, charming story that I would recommend to all my friends! ^_^
Jen Davis08/11/06
A beautiful story. Masterfully written. I absolutely loved it!
Venice Kichura08/12/06
This was so beautifully written! I love it!
terri tiffany08/13/06
The title was perfect and the twist caught me nicely!:) Very good storytelling.
Pat Guy 08/14/06
You got me and I loved it! A master for sure!
Virginia Gorg08/14/06
A good story - I thought this was the first wedding, but I'm not surprised it was the 2nd - and probably better, too. Thank you.
Jan Ackerson 08/14/06
Love it, love it, love it!!!
Brenda Craig08/14/06
An absolulte delight in every way. Wonderful!
Joanne Malley08/14/06
What a sweet story; romantic and endearing! I loved the vision I got of her 85-year-old husband marrying her all over again. I think this is every happily married woman's dream come true! :) Jo
Trina Courtenay08/15/06
You got me! The twist was great. A true Master's work indeed.
Beth Muehlhausen08/15/06
Sniff....how SWEET! I mean really, how many young guys would be this romantic? And then actually pull it off 60 years later?!? Very nicely done. :-)
Joanne Sher 08/15/06
Just beautiful. I loved this woman AND her husband. What a wonderful story of a vision and a vow.(Perfect title, by the way!)
Cheryl Harrison 08/16/06
All I can say is ... wow.
T. F. Chezum08/16/06
Very good. Loved the story. Great job.
Jessica Schmit08/17/06
Our wonderful Lynda is first!!!! Im so happy for you girl!! You totally deserve it!
Trina Courtenay08/17/06
1st place EC Lynda - Congrats!
Rita Garcia08/17/06
CONGRATULATIONS! This is a beautiful story of life and love!
Sherry Wendling08/17/06
Congratulations, Lynda! Absolutely captivating story, and so beautifully thought out, right to the end. One of the most satisfying reads I've enjoyed here!
Linda Germain 08/17/06
WOW! Lynda, you have really done it now! :0) What a wonderful story that will be a blessing to many. I am so proud of you. LG
Gary Sims08/17/06
Lynda - a beautiful story and a well deserved win - congratulations.
Karen Treharne08/17/06
Congratulations Lynda: A well-thought out story with a delightful twist. Great crafting - great ending - great read -created by a great writer.
Debbie OConnor08/17/06
Lynda,

Congratulations! I love this entry. It was so sweet. I just reread it and I have a lump in my throat all over again. It was a perfect entry for vision.
Helen Paynter08/17/06
Lynda, what a wonderful story. A thoroughly well-deserved number 1. COngratulations
Lori Othouse 08/17/06
Congratulations! This is so, so beautiful. I loved how you did this, transitioning the story like that. Excellent story, a very well-deserved win! Blessings!
Stephen Paynter08/20/06
This story is beautiful ... and well told too. A well deserved win. Congratulations! I love romances, and they don't get more romantic than this. Thank you for writing a moving piece that will stay with me a long time.
Lisa Cox08/26/06
Lynda-that was so good. I got chills as I read the end. It was romantic and funny and everything every woman wants their life with their husband to be, fairy tale like. You deserved to be at the top of Editors choice this week.

Lisa Cox
Mo 06/22/07
I really LOVED this one way back when. & I haven't forgotten it! I hope it does well in Best of the Best!
David F. Palmieri Sr. 10/01/07
A beautiful story. I'm lost for words...