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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Vision (08/03/06)

TITLE: Legend of Noisiv
By Virginia Gorg


The Legend of Noisiv

In a land long ago and far away was a village named Noisiv.
There was a time when the villagers seldom spoke for many years.
An account of this story has been carried from generation to generation.

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A king named Nomolos ruled with kindness and great wisdom. The King was admired by all kings, both near and far. Convoys would arrive seeking his wisdom. The king had two sons who were wise, and one who was devious. The devious son was named Nebuer and conspired against his father. He plotted evil, but his father was too wise to be found vulnerable.

One day, Nebuer was able to work his crafty plan. While Nomolos traveled to a distant empire to give wisdom, Nebuer was left in charge for ten years. (This was because he was the eldest son, but Nomolos had misgivings about this charge.)

Soon, Nebuer wrote a decree stating that all the villagers would bow and honor him as he walked through the streets. In addition no one was allowed to talk unless it was favorably about Nebuer. Disobedience meant a visit to the dungeon filled with lions.

Nebuer enjoyed his status and the quietness of the village. Conversation dwindled because people would rather not speak than lie about Nebuer’s forced niceness. The lions were becoming well fed and lazy. This went on for many years while the people’s fear increased. The youngest son, Leinad, sent an urgent message to their father.

Nebuer’s brothers tried to convince him to cancel this decree. One day, Nebuer had grown tired of his brothers’ disobedience and ordered them to the lions’ den. Leinad and Nosmas were thrown into the den and the lid was securely fastened.

The villagers were horrified and finally spoke out against Nebuer. Soon, the lions’ den was overflowing with people. The lions, who were no longer hungry, were now as docile as newborn kittens. The children rode them as horses and laughter was heard in the den.

Nebuer was dumbfounded and did not know what to do. He lifted the lid and was stunned to find his two brothers, and all the other people, alive. Nebuer had no recourse except to release the prisoners, including the lions who became pets of the villagers.

Nebuer called his brothers to his throne and demanded to know why they had not been eaten by the lions.

Leinad told Nebuer they had been protected by the King.

“Who is this king? Has our father returned?” Nebuer demanded.

“This King rules over even our father.”

“There is no One greater in authority than King Nomolos,” cried Nebuer.

Leinad explained his dream of the King of kings. “He sits on a throne of purest white ruling with righteousness and has more wisdom than can be contained in the universe. He created people to praise Him and follow His decrees. In return, He offers us an eternal life of peace and happiness.”

As Leinad spoke, Nebuer noticed a softening of his feelings. He felt sorrow and remorse the first time in his life. He felt compassion. Nebuer determined to change his life immediately and learn about this King. He reversed his decree of years earlier, much to the delight of the villagers.

Within days, word was received that King Nomolos would soon be home. Nebuer ran through the village begging forgiveness and speaking of the Great King.

When King Nomolos arrived, the villagers were happy and confident. Nomolos was surprised to find the tamed lions. Upon hearing the tale of Nebuer’s decree, overturn, and the Great King, Nomolos fell to his knees in thankfulness. He had also dreamt of the King of kings.

King Nomolos declared that everyone would follow the King of kings. Rejoicing filled the streets and peace was established.

In wisdom, Nomolos issued a decree to change the village’s name from Noisiv to Vision, because everyone’s eyes were opened to the truth.

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Jan Ackerson 08/10/06
There were bits and pieces of several Bible stories and characters here, so I was confused at first. I think that someone unfamiliar with those stories would enjoy this legend quite a bit; it reads almost like a fairy tale.
Amy Michelle Wiley 08/10/06
I liked the way you tied in the Bible story. Good job.
david grant08/12/06
How come I didnt see that word backwards was Vision? ARgh! Enjoyed it.
Marilyn Schnepp 08/12/06
Neat story - but my vision is failing as I didn't see the Noisiv as Vision either. But interesting story for fairy tale lovers. Nice approach to week's Topic.
Joanne Sher 08/16/06
I agree with Jan - all the different bits and pieces of different bible stories (along with all the different backward bible names) did make me feel like I was trying to figure out who this was about. Once I let go of that, however, I really did enjoy this! Very nicely written!