The Official Writing Challenge
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03/14/05
"Nanky was always the shrewd one among all of our cousins. He grew up to be a successful car salesman which surprised none of us." I will have you know that my husband is a car salesman - and an HONEST one! LOL (Actually, he is getting out of the business partly because of the DIShonesty) :-)
Cute story. Made me smile.
Blessings, Lynda

Short and sweet. Loaded with lots of details and wonderful imagery. I smiled as I was reading. You are a storyteller. Good post.
I enjoyed reading this story. You gave it an interest by your telling and imagery that placed it beyond just an ordinary event.
I could just see this character wanting to join in and trying to maintain what "everyone else expected of her". You let us feel her sense of freedom for a brief moment. Great read
03/23/05
As far as your writing goes, write on! You made a beautiful piece out of a child's experience.