The Official Writing Challenge
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08/09/06
YOu wrote this very well. What I think might not appeal to a reader is it comes across as a sermon and most people want sermons only in church. You could say the same truths and deliver it in a way where more people will listen, and learn and grow without compromising anything you said. Please take this in a good way as I am just giving feedback as a reader. You want your reader to read what you write so sometimes we have to be creative to get our mesasge out there.:) Your writing skills are terrific!
08/09/06
You have shared many wonderful thoughts in this article. I agree with Terri's comments. It may also be helpful to narrow your focus and then expand on those ideas. Keep writing.