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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Work (07/27/06)

TITLE: Tireless Exhaustion
By Summer Cordon
07/28/06


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There you are tirelessly breaking your back
Not accepting the time that you lack
Given your objective you strain to achieve
Not willing to accept the workerís reprieve

Unwavering, since you answered the call
Weary, but determined never to fall
Your hands move feverishly through each detail
Mindfully purposed to always prevail

The hours of each day never suffice
With determination, youíll pay the price
Weighing the costs, you see the fine line
And the goal, sweet victory, truly sublime

All those who watch are completely amazed
Admiring your work as you push through, unfazed
In the frenzy they whisper, pointing out this and that
Trying to figure out how to tell you with tact

In the midst of their amazement they canít help but wonder
How you have failed to notice your blunder
And now ruthlessly trying to get your attention
You barely notice that itís you they beckon

Reluctantly you set aside your precious work
And look around to find the family you shirk
With longing they call you back to their fold
And you stare and wonder how youíve gotten so old


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Marilyn Schnepp 08/03/06
No punctuation at all - not even a period at the end. However, it is true and makes sense. But due to Adam and Eve's goof up - we must work. Nicely done.
Summer Cordon08/16/06
Hmm...well, I personally loved my poem, even though I forgot the punctuation. Guess I got so caught up in my first challenge that I overlooked such and important aspect of writing. Oops!

It's got a great message, don't you think?

(he,he,he! I love commenting on my own work!)