The Official Writing Challenge
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Poetry is not my area, but I liked the simplicity of this work. You've done a good job. A few of your rhymes were pushing things just a bit (frown/upside down--something a bit more original here would've been nice).

But, I liked the emotion and message behind the words. I also liked how you kept an even theme throughout your piece.

Nicely done.