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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Walk (07/20/06)

TITLE: Think Before You Act
By Ruth Neilson


Abby shakes her head as she stares at the variety of wedding dresses. Her husband, Danny, is determined to create the best wedding memories that he can. His plan covers every possible detail with special attention being paid to what she would want, and yet she is refusing.

I sigh and lean forward. “Abby, why can’t you go through with this?”
“Because, I don’t even know if he still loves me...if he’s just doing this out of pity or...” Her voice drops away painfully.

Her unstated plan is starting to come to mind. “Abby, you know that if you walk away from him...you’re killing not only yourself, but him as well.”

Abby doesn’t say a word. Her physical wounds are completely healed...but the spiritual and mental wounds are festering. With jerky movements, she points to a gown, stating that she will be a ‘good little solider’ and ignore whatever she is feeling.

She is about to walk away from the best thing that God has ever given to her. The attack she survived has crumpled her career because of her refusal to speak with the police chaplain. Everyone who knows her, especially those of us who are family (by birth or by marriage), can see the pain that she is causing in her marriage. Danny is desperate for her to smile, and a vow renewal, to let her know he loves her, is his last option.

“Fee, I know that marriage is for life...but I died that night, and no one can understand that.” She sadly states as she stands and heads for the door.

“Just, think about what you are doing...please.”
“Do you really think that I haven’t thought about this? It’s been on my mind since it happened.” Abby explodes. Her smoky eyes flash dangerously, then something just gives inside of her. “Just tell me when and where, and I’ll be there...”

She isn’t going to be there willingly.
I wonder if she is even going to be there at all. I hope so, for her sake and for her marriage.

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Lynda Schultz 07/28/06
We need some more detail about the beackground to the story, a little fleshing out. Otherwise, there is good stuff here.
Marilyn Schnepp 07/29/06
I have just read two Mystery stories - back to back. I am beginning to think I'm losing it - or what marbles I HAD in my head yesterday are now missing. What? Why? Who? and How? So many blanks and nobody to clue me in. Intriguing? Yes! Understandable? Not exactly, I definitely need help with this one.
Steve Uppendahl07/30/06
You've done a nice job of piquing my interest. I want to know more about Abby and what happened. Who is the narrator, btw?

As the comments stated above, more detail would've helped. Still, you've done a good job bring us in, just show us a bit more.
Kaylee Blake 08/01/06
I have to agree. Great job, but where are you going with this? What happens next? Why did this happened? What happend to Abby? Com'on! I need more info! I know there's more to the story, but I don't know what it is and it's killing me!
What you have is good, but I think there should be more.