The Official Writing Challenge
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07/27/06
I wasn't sure how this was going to tie into the subject "walk" whenI started reading. Your last sentence was great and it clued me in!
07/28/06
I love this story, perhaps because not long ago I sat in my living room with some people from our church to lead a memorial service for a dear friend whose ashes sat before us on my coffee table. It was a "God" moment for sure.

One tiny thing that caught my eye. I think "stigma" is used incorrectly in your first sentence: Perhaps something like "aversion" would be more appropriate.

Great writing nonetheless.
07/29/06
In the 2nd paragraph "brace" needs a "d"...and when they sat in "silent", it needs to be "silence"; however, other than that - this was a very endearing and sweet story about love, friendship and understanding. I loved the last sentence, so very touching. A beautiful last word, and a job well done!
I felt as though I was actually there. You feel the pain but also the peace. Great writing.