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07/29/06
I think you meant "seeing things from an different angle"...(not angel); anyway, unique perspective here - seeing things from an angel's point of view. Nicely done, and I liked the last sentence. Good job.
Very cool idea, using the angel's perspective. I've done it myself, and it's quite the trip isn't it?

I would've liked to have seen a longer piece. You have a great idea for your story, but I'd like to have seen more detail--how did Alexander feel when he saw the various acts of kindness and those making the wrong choices? How did the narrator feel? Could you hear or smell anything?

Also, the angel's name changed from Alexander to Alexandra. An easily fixed mistake.

Great concept for a story and very entertaining. Keep it up.