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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Walk (07/20/06)

TITLE: Walking His Way to Heaven
By Marilyn Schnepp
07/21/06


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His father was missing
and "Thuse" was alarmed;
"Perhap he's kidnapped
or even worse - he's harmed!"

The family was worried,
about where he could be;
for nobody had seen him
since half past three.

They searched the village
everywhere he might go;
and questioned his neighbors,
even ole' Pigpen Joe.

"Have you seen my father?"
Thuse peered in each face,
but they shook their heads "No";
There just wasn't a trace!

Dusk turned to darkness
Then darkness to night,
So Thuse gave up searching
until dawn's early light.

It was Seven days later
he got his first clue;
when a man said, "Hey Thuse,
I've been looking for you!

"I observed your father
About a week ago,
walking with a friend
In that valley below.

"They were walkin' and talkin'
like old friends do,
when suddenly they linked arms,
and like eagles - they flew!

"Believe me, Methuselah,
I would not lie...
I saw them lift off
heading straight for the sky!"

Thuse looked relieved,
and shook the man's hand;
"I believe you, my friend,
And I now understand.

"We all know my father,
walked daily with God,
and the two were as close
as two peas in a pod.

"So it's not a surprise
He would leave earthen sod,
and one day keep walking
up to heaven with God."


* * *

"Enoch walked with God, then he was no more, because God took him away." (Gen 5:24 NIV)


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Lynda Schultz 07/28/06
This is good - what a novel way of telling Enoch's story! Good writing.
Philip Barnes07/31/06
I enjoyed this very much. It was fun and inspirational. Oh that we could walk as closely with God that our family might understand with such clarity the moments we walk with God.
Stephen Paynter07/31/06
Well done! A great take on Enoch. By the way, congratulations of getting the only level 2 Davey!
Jan Ackerson 08/01/06
How charming! Like last week's entry, I'd love to see this one illustrated and put into a Sunday School curriculum. Or, I can see children preforming it, almost like a rap. Love it.
Joanne Sher 08/01/06
What a neat "take" on the Enoch story. I must admit, I was trying to figure out what kind of a name "Thuse" was - but I'm glad you used it - otherwise you definitely would have given up the identity WAY too soon! Great job!
Marilyn Schnepp 08/02/06
"I'm sure you've heard of Enoch

that patriarch of old -

who walked his way to heaven...

NOW walks on streets of Gold."
Trina Courtenay08/02/06
Very well done and a joy to read. I found it flows nicely. Keep writing for the glory of HIM!
william price08/03/06
I want to say, "Wow!", but I won't. I'm thinking it though. This is "blue ribbon" good. It flowed like a beautiful river on a lazy summer day. I think with the right illustrator this could/would be an excellent childrens book. I know I would read it to my Grandkids over and over, and say, "I know the author too." Great job!!!!! Five exclaimation points is the most I give.
God Bless!
Debbie Sickler08/03/06
CONGRATULATIONS on your win!!!!
Jen Davis08/03/06
Congrats Marilyn! I see I'm not the only one encouraging you to publish for children. Great job!
Sylvia Green Chatman08/03/06
Excellent poem.
Edy T Johnson 08/03/06
My dear friend, Marilyn! What a delight to see you receiving this magna cum laude recognition! You write so well, even poetry (which I don't recall reading from you til now). I agree with the above commenters that this needs to find an illustrator so we can all buy the book for our grandchildren!

Enoch is the perfect Bible story character for this challenge, and you did him up proud! Congratulations, Marilyn---and a big "thank you," too, for your comments on so many of my stories. I appreciate you!
Jessica Schmit08/05/06
I was looking through some of the previous challenge winners when I stumbled across this wodnerful piece. You did an exceptional job with this. It was funny, serious, the rthymn was perfect. The message was very creative. I'm only a little bumed it didn't place higher. Great work!
D. Phenes08/14/06
Marilyn, great poem. It's was very reminiscent of my " Nanie's poems" My grandmother my inspiration. Thanks again for sharing your writing. God bless
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Jan Kamp08/16/06
Congratulations, Marilyn! Nice job. Only rarely do I read poetry all the way through (my mind wonders)but this one kept my attention. Agree with comments & suggestions above. Let us know when it gets published :o)
c clemons02/15/10
Finally got around to reading your poem. This is excellent, it is pure scripture and the only creative license is the dialogue which is acceptable when relating a biblical story. I hope you have worked at getting this published.


   
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