The Official Writing Challenge
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07/27/06
A delightful story that made me stop and think about my own life. Well written and Thank you for sharing.
I really enjoyed this piece. Felt like I was right there.
08/01/06
Oh, this was great! Well-written. I felt like I was walking along with you experiencing the same things.
Excellent entry. I love your opening paragraphs of description. (I love it when writers bring in multiple senses into their writing, as you did.)

I was a bit puzzled by your dramatic paragraph--looking into the mirror and seeing all your sins, etc. You mention you can see all these things, yet you ask several questions instead of making statements or exlamations. Nothing wrong with it, I'm just curious as to any meaning behind it.

Still, you've written a wonderful story. Well done.