The Official Writing Challenge
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03/08/05
You did a very nice job moving the story along with realistic, believable dialog. Good story, and you got the point across. Good writing.
03/08/05
What an interesting concept ... the wife being the favourite, which is as it should be, but then the two adults each playing favourites with the daughters, which is wrong. Thought provoking. Well done.
03/09/05
Very interesting concept. The dialogue kept up the interest to show how both were playing favourites with their girls. Thanks for sharing.
The strong point here for me was that in order to change something, you often have to first examine yourself and be honest. Without that she couldn't have gotten a dialog with her husband going. So often we feel we have to win all the way and you showed here that isn't possible with human emotions. I liked this slant on the story