The Official Writing Challenge
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03/08/05
I liked how you used the dialog to keep your story moving, and integrating the food preparation into the story helped me to see the scene in my head. Nice work.
03/08/05
I take my hat off to you mothers! Isn't it great to know that God is training and moulding us just as you do your children. I enjoyed your description of 'mutilated lettuce' as you chopped in frustration!
Oh, how well you captured a mother's frustration! Indeed they are not appreciated till the children are grown!! It's so hard and so seldom do we turn to God like this mom did to chase away the frustrations.
03/10/05
I liked the way you told your story interspersed with dialogue while you were mutilating the lettuce. But you found peace after your chat with God. That is truly wonderful.
Nice story. The structure was unique and easy to follow.