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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Soul (07/13/06)

TITLE: the eternal cotton candy ballet
By Brenda Craig
07/17/06


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an infinite being stretches out across bars of boundless time
pulling open wide, heavy curtains of dark velvet
encased in eternal mysteries, fashioned before the finite
fully enraptured, He delights among formations of incense

pulling open wide, heavy curtains of dark velvet
soaking in pools of light, irresistible attraction converges
fully enraptured, He delights among formations of incense
as swirling, twirling wafts of cotton candy infusions dance

soaking in pools of light, irresistible attraction converges
spreading wings, casting shadows of eternal promise
as swirling, twirling wafts of cotton candy infusions dance
soluble in His eternal essence, beyond earthly bounds

spreading wings, casting shadows of eternal promise
catapulting shapes and forms through hallowed holes
soluble in His eternal essence, beyond earthly bounds
weaving together molecular, structured impressions

catapulting shapes and forms through hallowed holes
into predestined cavities of intentional acceptance
weaving together molecular, structured impressions
congealed from the combination of essence and sound

into predestined cavities of intentional acceptance
infinite mysteries forming into intricate structure
congealed from the combination of essence and sound
with fluid life from behind curtains of deepest velvet

infinite mysteries forming into intricate structure
fleshing out cotton candy infusions of dance
with fluid life from behind curtains of deepest velvet
wafting oxygen injects through tunnels of expansion

fleshing out cotton candy infusions of dance
transporting infinite essence through boundless time
wafting oxygen injects through tunnels of expansion
irresistible desires envelope, inhabiting eternal mysteries

transporting infinite essence through boundless time
forming out of earthy space, habitations of light
irresistible desires envelope, inhabiting eternal mysteries
dwelling in the heart of One - enraptured before finite time

forming out of earthy space, habitations of light
molecular structure gives way, compelled into solid form
dwelling in the heart of One - enraptured before finite time
creating a likeness, an image, a being of His own kind

molecular structure gives way, compelled into solid form
breaths of predetermined acceptance express vocal delight
creating a likeness, and image, a being of His own kind
images of communion rise out of dusty, structured space

breaths of predetermined acceptance express vocal delight
stirred by His incense, oxygen released speaks its first form
images of communion rise out of dusty, structured space
mixture is now complete between finite and the divine

stirred by His incense, oxygen released speaks its first form
velvet curtains drawn, reveal the eternal mystery of the dance
mixture is now complete between finite and divine
cotton candy infusions flesh out complex beauty - Man

velvet curtains drawn, reveal the eternal mystery of the dance
essence of ZoŽ; creating, pulsating, filling, a living - Soul
cotton candy infusions flesh out complex beauty - Man
structured dust, essence of life, spirit of Him - Now Triune

essence of ZoŽ; creating, pulsating, filling a living - Soul
salvation spreads newborn wings, casting its eternal shadow
structured dust, essence of life, spirit of Him - Now Triune
dancing, enraptured with One - producing souls of like kind

salvation spreads newborn wings, casting its eternal shadow
once encased in eternal mysteries fashioned before the finite
dancing, enraptured with One - producing souls of like kind
an infinite being, stretching out across bars of boundless time

the soul goes onÖdancing an eternal ballet
enraptured, producing
like kind
for the
One
enraptured
before
finite
time


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Jan Ackerson 07/20/06
Wow, this poem defies description--reading it was like being at the lakeshore, being washed over by wave upon wave of gentleness. I liked it a lot, the images were beautiful, and I also liked that it returned to the beginning. I only wonder if it was a bit too long--I'll admit that I started to skim toward the end. But it certainly was a lovely experience.
Lisa Vest07/21/06
This poem felt like a dance. I love the pattern of using the 2nd line of each section to begin the next. I'm sure this was not an easy write, but a beautiful read! Great job!
Mishael Witty07/22/06
Beautiful, hypnotic. I was a little disappointed because I didn't want it to end, but I guess it had to ...
Sue Dent07/22/06
You do realize this would be incredibly difficult to judge. There's no beginning, there's no end, it's not like anything else anyone could write because it's a MASTERPIECE! I did not want to finish it in one sitting 'cuz I was scared I'd miss something!!!! Good Grief how do yo write like this. I wouldn't even know where to start!
George Parler 07/23/06
Wow! The reading was like watching a blank bare merry-go-round. But with each revolution a beautiful piece was added until it was fully arrayed in all its mesmerizing beauty. Well done.
Rita Garcia07/24/06
I tried to find my favorite line, and I only found they were each one magnificent.
WOW!!!!
Jan Ross07/24/06
Awesome .... Absolutely Awesome! Masterful ... Absolutely Awesome! Inspired ... Absolutely Awesome! Wow! Wow! Wow!
william price07/25/06
This demonstrates great talent, combined with anointing and a submitted soul. This was GREAT. (I think that was my first GREAT this week.)
It was like walking through a garden in full bloom; one beautiful aroma after the next. I didn't want to leave.
God Bless!!!!!
Suzanne R07/25/06
Wow - this was amazing!!!! Brilliant!
Trina Courtenay07/25/06
Thank-you for telling us to take our time while reading this.........Masterpiece! Double wow, no...triple. I felt like I was being washed ashore, pulled back out, washed ashore...it's simply amazing!
Dr. Sharon Schuetz07/25/06
Beautiful, inspiring, wonderful. I loved it.
Shari Armstrong 07/25/06
Amazing work!!!! BEAUTIFUL!
Linda Watson Owen07/25/06
Another wow for you Brenda! I'm really enjoying the creative structure you've used here as well as your rich word choices. I agree with Jan. It is very much like waves of an ocean at the shore. So creative!!
Kimberly Mitchell07/26/06
I love your style of writing ,and the name of your entry is unique. Five stars. (:
Lucile McKenzie07/26/06
I think you are in the wrong category. Anyone who writes like this is not an intermediate! Beautiful and imaginative.
Amy Michelle Wiley 07/27/06
I found the structure of this quite fascinating. Well done! I didnít quite get what cotton candy had to do with anything, and I donít agree with the theology that the Trinity was created (ďNow TriuneĒ --I believe all three parts have always been), but otherwise good job!