The Official Writing Challenge
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This is just awesome--beautifully written. I did a slight double-take when your narrator, previously very articulate, slipped into the vernacular ("Didn't many moons pass..."). But that's very a story that's just full of top-notch writing. Really, really wonderful.
Fantabulous writing of an unforgettable story; a brutal childhood, but moved me to tears at the ending when he was allowed to stand Right of the Moon... Just great! And I will remember this story for many moons to come! Excellent!
This must have been inspired. At the last line I gasped with my
hand to my mouth and just started to cry. And cry. God spoke to me through this story and I thank you for your obedience in sharing it. God bless your heart.
All I can say is WOW!
Very well done. Thanks for sharing.
Jerome! Can you explain to me what you're doing in the intermediate level?
Absolutely stunning. I was hooked from the first paragraph. God bless your work.
Outstanding job. Very powerful writing (I sincerely hope this is fiction, btw).

You did a great job of providing an impact throughout. Your first sentence is excellent. Very raw emotion present in this story.

I thought you did your best work in providing two very different tones (Jerome and Mother) evenly throughout. Hard to do and impressively done.

I don't see you staying at this level past this week.

A tribute to the truth that when our focus in life is right, we can survive anything and God can turn that anything to something that brings Him glory. Great work.