The Official Writing Challenge
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I am a child of the desert and this brought back some very real memories.You described it well.I enjoyed reading this.Was she rescued?
I sure hope this person didn't drive off and leave her there.God knew she needed a quick rescue.You can't last long in the desert.:-)
07/20/06
Fascinating! I learned a lot by reading this piece. Aside from a few minor typos and sentence fragments, this was a very engaging story.
07/21/06
Well done and a good use of descriptive words. Flows well yet leaves us wondering if the truck driver helped her out.
07/22/06
This is a great story. Thanks for sharing it. The writing could have been a little clearer with more correct usage of punctuation (especially commas). I also noticed you used the word "then" a lot, when you really didn't need to. Still, this was fascinating, and a great reminder that God is always there to help us.