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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Soul (07/13/06)

TITLE: Doubting Thomas
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07/15/06


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“As you can see, the heart…” Mr. Brown, third grade teacher, rotated around to glare at a couple of his students. They immediately sat up in their seats and pretended to be paying attention the entire time. “As I was saying, the heart is an organ with two valves, the…” He paused when he spotted a hand raised in the air. “Yes, Jessica?”

“What about the soul?”

This question threw him off slightly. When he regained his composure, he answered stiffly, “the soul is not an actual, physical organ. In fact, it does not even exist, simply a myth produced by the Aztecs in-”

“That’s not what the Bible says,” she interrupted once again. “The Bible says that the soul is-”

“This is a public school, Miss Dean. I realize that such a transition from a private school can cause some confusion, but here we do not go by what the Bible says. It is not scientifically proven, but merely a book of fiction.”

“That’s not true!”

“Go to the office!”

With a huff, she jumped out of her chair, making sure to let it bang and rock against the floor, disrupting the entire class. With a chin held high, she snatched up her pocket Bible and carried it with the rest of her books in perfect viewing access, her point made clear. When her parents came to pick her up, she was in a worse tizzy than when she left the classroom only minutes before.

“Honey, some people don’t believe that the Bible is true,” her mother was telling her.

“Why?”

“Because there’s nothing to prove that it is true. At least nothing that they’ll accept to be true at any rate.”

“Because they can’t see it?”

“Yes. That’s one reason. They can’t see God, therefore they don’t believe in him.”

“So, they’re a bunch of Thomas’s?”

“Exactly. But we must not be put down by them. Our goal is to help them see without using their eyes.”

“How do we do that?”

“I don’t know…”


“Then Jesus told him, ‘Because you have seen me, you have believed; blessed are those who have not seen and yet have believed’.” (John 20:29)


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Jan Ackerson 07/20/06
Jessica's a brave little girl! This seems more like a high school discussion than a third grade one, though, and as a public school teacher, I have to say that it's very unlikely that a student would be sent to the office for such a thing.

I really like your light touch with dialog, and your open ending.
Virginia Gorg07/21/06
I agree that this seemed a bit ahead of third graders, but I like the concept. I would have liked to see a bit more of "how can we do that" - good potential! :)
Mishael Witty07/22/06
Very good story. I was a little disappointed by the mother's answer at the end, though. She could have mentioned how people can only see the truth if the Holy Spirit shows it to them, or as we Christians present the example in our daily walk. But maybe she wouldn't have time to think of all that, since it was only a few minutes later and she was upset about her daughter being thrown out of class ... That might be something to consider for the sequel! : )
Elizabeth Hale08/12/06
I would have had Mom say, "They are able to see Him through us" or something along those lines. We are His witnesses here, after all. This is how people get to Know Him--they start to wonder what it is about us, and then they start asking questions. Good job, Shannon.