The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story is well-written, and kept my attention to the end. Good job.
07/17/06
You can kick up the quality of your work by eliminating dialog tags and replacing them with short, descriptive phrases. Nice story, perhaps a bit of a sudden, neat wrap-up, but I really like the realistic office descriptions.
07/19/06
I found the boss' last comment to be a little to full of "Christianese" for a new convert. But I admired the ladies for their commitment to prayer in spite of their boss. If only more people would do that.
This was just GREAT! Congrats on your GREAT win.
08/01/06
Thanks for writing about angry and grumpy people in the work place. They are everywhere, and stomp on people. Prayer is a wonderful way to allow God to work.
02/21/08
I've worked in places just like the one you describe...one of my bosses was your main character! God is great! ...and so is this story!