The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story is well-written, and kept my attention to the end. Good job.
You can kick up the quality of your work by eliminating dialog tags and replacing them with short, descriptive phrases. Nice story, perhaps a bit of a sudden, neat wrap-up, but I really like the realistic office descriptions.
I found the boss' last comment to be a little to full of "Christianese" for a new convert. But I admired the ladies for their commitment to prayer in spite of their boss. If only more people would do that.
This was just GREAT! Congrats on your GREAT win.
Thanks for writing about angry and grumpy people in the work place. They are everywhere, and stomp on people. Prayer is a wonderful way to allow God to work.
I've worked in places just like the one you of my bosses was your main character! God is great! ...and so is this story!