The Official Writing Challenge
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06/23/06
Unfortunately this is the same teaching as that of the Nicolaitans that are condemned in Revelation and Jude. By the way your main characters name changes from Paul to David.
06/23/06
I like the allegory, and the painful truth revealed by the overheard conversation. I think this piece might be even more powerful without Paul/David--just the Death Force plotting. Powerful stuff.
06/26/06
Lot of theological technical roaming in this, probably due for a longer piece.