The Official Writing Challenge
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I love cemetaries so your title drew me in. I enjoyed it very much but wanted to read more about the pillow, why it was special. Thanks for sharing.
06/23/06
Oh dear, my heart broke with 10-year-old you. I'm glad you told us that you've since healed from this sad event. A sweet, tender story.
06/25/06
You shared a part of the little girl in such a perfect way. I was there with her and my heart broke along with hers. I might suggest changing the last few sentences somehow to carry the impact somewhat more but I would not change a thing anywhere else. great job!
06/26/06
Thanks for sharing this tight descriptive essay. Work on losing speech tags and all this will improve.
06/27/06
It's difficult to leave a comment saying "Great Story"...when it is possibly a true story which is obviously very sad. But I liked the way you wrote it, and it kept my interest..and I understood your emotions. Thank you.