The Official Writing Challenge
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06/22/06
Tp be more Reader Friendly, I suggest you separate your paragraphs with space - otherwise it looks like an uphill task instead of a pleasureable read. Thanks for sharing your story.
06/23/06
What a wonderful story! Marlena has an authentic little girl's voice, albeit very wise. It would have even more impact, I think, if you ended with her teaching you how to live...the irony of that statement would give your ending a real Pow!, and she already knows how to die--you've showed us that beautifully in the body of the story. Very well done.
this is wonderful. Such wisdom in one so young, but realistic. good story.
06/25/06
Excellent! Your dialgue was perfect and you showed rather than told!:) Very believable story that touches the heart.
06/26/06
Good dialogue, however, break up the paragraphs with spaces for readability.
Congratulations, Laura! This is an absolutely beautiful, deeply moving piece. You made me fall in love with Marlena! A well-deserved win...And I'm really looking forward to more of your stuff. Do you put hints on the Boards? I hope so!
06/29/06
Awesome! Congratulations! :)
06/30/06
What a wonderful, heart enlightening story. Beautiful to the core. Everyone has expressed my own thoughts. Congratulations!