The Official Writing Challenge
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06/22/06
A very touching story of a slice of life that isn't pleasant...but rather bittersweet. Well done.
Sad, but I loved every minute of reading it. Especially the first few paragraphs and the descriptiveness. Thanks for the heart and the work.
06/23/06
Wow, this is very powerful--we hear every sound and smell every scent right along with your narrator, and then we feel her grief and questioning and pain. I read it, and then I went right back and read it again. Awesome story.
06/23/06
This is very well written, but it is a pity it didn't offer some hope at the end, leaving the main character still questioning and blaming God.
06/26/06
Very good writing/great choice of wording. You can really sense the characters pain and vivid memories. I know there's a word limit, but I would've liked to have seen some sort of hint of God's redeeming love and grace entering this character's life.
The Lord's redeeming love and grace is not always delivered
the moment we wish for it.
Wisdom about life - and the
fact that it does not always
have the desired 'Hollywood
Happy' ending - comes with age
and maturity.
06/26/06
Well composed, graphic, and descriptive. Was looking for a more positive ending.