The Official Writing Challenge
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06/22/06
Very creative thinking...and I loved the next to the last line..."For God in all His wonder, danced with me the best. Nice job.
06/23/06
Good use of repetition in the "I love the dance" usage.

Since dances are generally flowing and rhythmic, I wonder if you'd consider lengthening the short, choppy lines. Just an experiment you might want to try; it might better reflect the meaning of your poem.

Some beautiful imagery here.
06/24/06
This is a very nice poem.
06/26/06
I like the creative way this is put together. There is a little problem as the verses go along, but a great start.