The Official Writing Challenge
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It is difficult in this small space to make helpful suggestions to a fellow writer, but have a friend or family member edit or "read" your work... and keep plugging away at your goal. Improvement comes with hard work, time, and determination. Thanks for sharing your story.
A lot of redundant language and a number of grammar issues that might be solved by a good proof read. There are a million stories to tell about hyperactive children, I am glad you took a mostly postitive approach here. A little work and this will come a long way.