The Official Writing Challenge
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Haunting and captivating. I had to read it several times... and as it went deeper, the pain grew... as you intended. Wonderful use of words.
Sometimes the words unsaid speak louder than the ones spoken. This is how well this poem worked. Well done. The use of little details gave flesh to the poem without making it smothering real. You struck a good balance between the physical and the etheral (scraping at joy). You left the reader haunted and wanting to know what happens to the narrator afterward. Thank you.
Miss Andre.
Wow! This is well done, but so painful! I am left with tears in my eyes and a lump in my throat. You have said it well.
I would have liked to see a more consistant beat, but the emotion of the poem was clear.
Great. *wipes away tears*
I should have commented earlier because this piece still stays with me. The emotion is powerful... something I think a lot of people can identify with. Keep writing and sharing! You have a gift!