The Official Writing Challenge
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Some great poetic phrases here..."Mother's love entwined with mother's wit....when she said, on my child this world would not sit"; also, "Sticks and stones, though hurled at me, could not break the arms that encircled me". Beautiful poetic prose - but the downside is (in my opinion) too long and too repetitious. But a really nice job!
This reads very much like lyrics that could be set to music.. especially the first half. I think it could be very powerful as a song. Good work!
Good imagery/wording. I agree that it could be tightened/shortened up a little.
But overall a great job.
I agree, a lot of melody here, possible part spoken, and part sung. The figurative language and phrasing in the poem created unforgetable images. Thanks for posting.