The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/06
A very sweet fairy tale/allegory.

I did wonder about this line, which seems contradictory:

Peace. It is important for all men to dwell in peace. Those who disobey will be punished severely.

You painted a beautiful word-pictre of the river.
06/09/06
A well told tale, a lot of good imagery. I liked the comparison of the princess/queen's age to the stages of the river.
This was a good story. Very creative.