The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/06
I like the way you helped us to get to know Ariana's parents, even though they never make an actual appearance.

Something to work on--instead of naming emotions (anger, hate, bitterness), show us how they play out in the characters' actions. You do that in several spots--good stuff. Consider ending with the brother driving away and the flowers on the table--the hatred is implied.

A thought-provoking story of family grace.
06/09/06
An excellent example of how living outside God's will leaves us without peace. Great converstaion between the siblings.