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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Personal Peace (06/01/06)

TITLE: Grampa Dan's Bench
By Allen Scovil


It was a little after lunch on a sunny, summer day; so, nine-year-old Mark ran down into the basement to find the lawn darts. He then took them out into the back yard and started to fling them into the air to see how high and how far he could throw them, then went to fetch them from where they had fallen.

"What are you up to?" came a gruff voice from the shady side of the shed where Mark's father stored the lawn tractor.

"Huh?" Mark pulled up short. "Oh, hi Grampa Dan. I'm playing lawn darts."

"Are you indeed?" Grampa Dan was sitting on a bench and leaning back against the shed, his straw hat down over his eyes. "Come on over here and let's chat." He patted the bench where he was inviting Mark to sit. Mark hesitated. Grampa Dan shifted the hat back on his head and looked at him. "What's the matter? You're not scared of your old grampa, are you?"

Mark knew he wasn't scared of him the way he was scared of bullies or those strangers the teachers at school always warn you about; but, it was just that this was Grampa Dan. He reluctantly approached, and, when he was in range, his grampa grabbed him and gave him a good tickle before allowing him to sit. Grampa Dan then leaned back again and positioned his hat so that he could see this time.

"Why do you sit here, Grampa Dan?" Mark asked as he swung his legs. "Isn't it boring and stuff?"

Grampa Dan chuckled hoarsely and worked to relight his pipe, which was always going out. "It's peaceful, boy," he said finally, and blew a smoke ring, to Mark's delight. "I can sit here all afternoon and think, if I don't fall asleep."

"What do you think about?"

"Hmm. About where I've been and what I've done, and where I'm going."

"Where are you going?"


This sort of talk made Mark uncomfortable; but, he was curious. "When?"

"Got no idea." He had a brief fit of coughing. "Soon enough, Lord knows, though I don't deserve it." He lowered his voice. "Things I've done, you see, and things I've said, especially to your gramma Lisa."

"But you loved Gramma Lisa, didn't you?"

"More than you'll know, boy." He pulled on his pipe. "But that doesn't stop a man from being proud and mule-headed sometimes. I'm sure she's already in heaven, having put up with the likes of me for so long; but, I learned one day."

When his grampa stayed silent too long, Mark prompted, "What did you learn?".

"Hm? Oh, one day I happened to catch her in the bedroom. She was praying, and I guess she never heard me come in. She was asking God to forgive me; but, when she asked Him for the strength so that she could forgive me too, why, that just tore me all up inside. I snuck out of the house again and went to have a long talk with the pastor." He sighed deeply and checked his pipe. It had gone out again. "I made it up to her after that. Just in time, too. She was gone before the end of the year." He relit the pipe. "But now, when I think of where I've been and the things that I've done, I can truthfully say, 'Thank you, Lord'." He smiled wistfully and blew a streamer of smoke into the breeze. "That's why I find it peaceful here. This bench is where I can talk with Him about those things and, when I do, He tells me they've all been fixed."

Grampa Dan went silent again; but, after a minute, Mark could hear a light snoring. He waited for a moment, then carefully removed the pipe from his grampa's hand and placed it onto the bench as he had seen his father do once. He then headed off to find someone to play with.

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pam bryan06/10/06
I loved your style of writing. It really drew me in and captured my interest. I wanted more!
Marilyn Schnepp 06/11/06
A great story and a really well written one. It kept my interest throughout and left a good, warm feeling inside me...perhaps you might call it a peaceful feeling. Nicely done.
Trina Courtenay06/12/06
I enjoyed this read. I found myself wanting more as well. This is great writing!

Keep up the great work.

Jan Ackerson 06/12/06
Very tender and sweet, with fully realized characters.
Lisa Vest06/12/06
Your grampa character reminded me of the Waltons, the father, gruff with rough edges but a velvet teddy bear on the inside, full of wisdom. I could even hear this character's voice in my mind as I read it. Great job.
Anita Neuman06/13/06
This story flows - so easy to read. I was right there with them, listening to Grandpa's voice.
Sharlyn Guthrie06/13/06
This was so easy to read and to follow. Great writing! I feel like I know Grampa Dan (or would like to know him)!
Dr. Sharon Schuetz06/14/06
Very well done. You draw us in and keep us to the end. Good job.
Edy T Johnson 06/14/06
I wonder how many stories my "favorites" page can hold? This is precious. You are a masterful writer and I like how much character development is conveyed through your characters' dialog. God bless your talent for His glory!
Deborah Porter 07/03/06
Allen, this really was a delightful entry in the "Personal Peace" challenge. When I set the topic, I hadn't realized that a lot of people would find it quite a difficult one to write about. However, you caught it perfectly with Grampa Dan. Well done. You rated very well with the judges, and if you aren't aware, you actually ranked 20th overall--which is excellent when you realize that there were nearly 200 entries that week.

Because it is such an excellent story, and because you are a 500 member, I would really love to see this story showcased for more people to read--on the front page of the August issue of FaithWriters' Magazine (the online monthly magazine www.faithwritersmagazine.com) Could you please send me a private message to let me know if this is okay with you. If it is, I will also need a short bio note from you to go with your story. You can find examples of other bio notes in this month's issue.

Hope to hear from you soon.

With love, Deb (Editor, FaithWriters' Magazine and Challenge Coordinator)