The Official Writing Challenge
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05/27/06
I think you did well to give the three characters different voices and evoke in a few words the situation and emotions that they find themselves in. I think I'd have liked a little more, especially in the middle scenario. Good stuff
05/28/06
I really like the idea of "alone joy" and "overwhelmed joy", which go against conventional, worldly wisdom. Nice job.
05/28/06
This is good. I, too would like to have seen a little more, especially in the middle section. I think a lot of people underestimate the importance of their "alone joy." Good job.
05/28/06
Creative look at joy! Good job!
05/28/06
I like the three different looks at joy. Good job!
05/29/06
I think many of us can relate to these "joys". Good job. You described them well.
05/29/06
I'm impressed that you were able to give each character a distinct voice, and you conveyed each character's situation without "telling" too much. Good job on a creative entry!
05/29/06
I liked your approach to the topic. My only suggestion would be to develop the second character a bit more to fully express the feelings of being a new parent. Your first character was beautifully written.