The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job on this true to life story. Watch for repetative phrasing, but good story!
This is a very interesting and realistic story. I love period romance! I really wanted to get to the end to see what would happen.

Do watch the repetition, but well done!
05/27/06
Love the way you told it from both angles. I did spot at least one tense jump. Apart from that, excellent job. BTW you have the respect of this Brit ;)
Nice story. I too liked the two sides from both husband and wife.
05/28/06
Well written, I too enjoy period romance!
05/28/06
How very intriguing, to write a story about "joy" called "numbness." That's more confirmation that joy isn't necessarily tied to merriness. A very clever approach to the story.
I loved your perspective from both angles. This is a very moving piece.
05/29/06
Loved the double POV and the plot - but most of all, I loved the wife as a flawed character. She is refreshingly realistic in her reaction to Peter's homecoming. Great job!
Nice story. Well written. Good job.
05/31/06
I'm hoping by that last sentence that you are suggesting that Eva wept with Joy...otherwise, I am disappointed in the ending...but that's only one person's opinion. Bittersweet story well told.