The Official Writing Challenge
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05/19/06
Love the ending--I hope she's going back to help the homeless family. But even if she's not--great ending. Work a bit on developing techniques to get your readers to identify more with your character--to feel what she's feeling. As it is, we are observers. I like the name you chose; it gives your story an additional element of depth.
Excellent. I liked everything about it.