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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Prosperity (05/11/06)

TITLE: PROSPERITY RISING
By Lisa Vest
05/16/06


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PROSPERITY RISING

The first month is not noticeable
Food not palatable.
Month two is oft the same.
Month three things begin to change.
And figure gets rearranged.
Month four you grow a little more
and feet begin to kick the floor.
Month five is great
Just fun, no ache.
Month six is neat and really sweet
A picture of the tiny feet
and sometimes even some parts.
Month seven, ahh! itís simply heaven
Stomach looks like bread with too much leaven.
Month nine is here
And then you hear
The cry of Prosperity.

The beginning year
Is full of tears,
Of diapers, bottles and such
Year two is cute,
The sweet things they do,
With talking, walking and such.
Year three is hard,
They can leave the yard,
By foot or scooter and such.
Year four through ten
Much changes when
You arenít looking and watching and such
Years eleven through twenty, oh no!
Now itís time to let go.
The result of Time and Prosperity and such.


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Jan Ackerson 05/19/06
An interesting concept--children as prosperity. The flow of this poem needs a little even-ing out, but it has an abundance of charm.
Rachel Rudd05/22/06
I liked the line "Stomach looks like bread with too much leaven." My little boy still looks like that at almost 2!
This is a neat concept of a child being the riches.
I agree the flow of the poem needs some work, but very sweet poem otherwise.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/23/06
This poem has a nice concept. With a little work it could be a real winner.
Anita Neuman05/23/06
Great take on the topic! One little thing to polish: you didn't mention month 8 in the first verse (that was jarring, since you mentioned every other month). But overall, this was a delighful read and a very cute concept. Good job.